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I'll look at yours after I complete these

I suggest a new process. You critique one to three of the designs of the person above you and then post one to three designs you would like critiqued. (Make sure to ping the people you critique.)

Critique of Liquidoven's Designs
Witches Familiar Aurleon


Very nice. I went through all the 1vis possibilities and I couldn't find anything that didn't look good. I think the color one is a little dark for some of the markings, but that's really minor.

The purple and the yellow contrast nicely and I they'll still look lovely even with color perturbation (randomization). I'm always amazed at how much the eye color on Aurleon's matters.

I love this design and would be thrilled to see it added to the themed set!

((I was planning on critiquing more, but I'm out of time for the moment.))

Here's the list of my designs: Click Here

I'm most interested in my first few designs.... They seem to get worse as you go down....

:D yea, i think that looks great personally. I really like the new eye color as well. c:

Awesome thank you!

Do you have a pic of what you based your Qitari off of? Something about the colors are a little off to me but if I had an idea, I could see where to go with it


Btw Im in love with almost every single one of your designs *.*

@bar- ^////^ aw thanks, my qits are really weird imo XD i based them off my idea of a possessed jack-o-lantern, the blue would be the ghosty-possession part

@emgeal
that's a great idea c: i think i'd like to give my critiquers the option of which ones they'd like to do though, rather than picking for them

also i think I'll start PM'ing critiques after this one just so the thread doesnt get too full~

black widow lupora:
-This is something that i see a lot of people do, but i suggest not using solid black in large spaces. My main reason for this is that you cant see the lineart, which causes your sylesties to lose form. Here is the original, and then one with slightly lighter colors.

-color 2 still shows up this way, but if you wanted you could also make that a little bit lighter
-maybe make the eyes a deeper red, like DB0000
-I really like this design because all of the genes work nicely together, which was a problem i had when designing my lups. I also like that your mutation color is uniform and looks good for all of them.

edit: D: sorry.. i forgot you wanted one of your first few

Liquidoven, with your bulbori, I'm not sure, but something seems a little... I don't even know... with the pinks and reds. It feels like there's something weird going on with the colour contrasts or something? Maybe try some different brightnesses of eye colour? (we messed with it a bit in the generator and for some reason, to us, the EC seems to work better either very bright or somewhat darker. Not sure why, but maybe try it and see what you think?)

Also, I feel like the aqua on the qitari stands out a bit to starkly from the oranges? Too saturated and bright, maybe.

And Sea Monster kelpari... remind us of clear water in the tropics, like someone's gone scuba-diving? Not sure what could be done to emphasise the 'monster' part... maybe desaturate the colours a bit to make them slightly greyer or something... hm.

Quite fond of the Watchful Eyes nytes, though we're always a bit of a sucker for nytes. Good colour contrast.

Also, I am, surprisingly, liking your morkko. Their colours work well.


well...
I suppose we need opinions on our luffox. PIRATE likes them, but Pirate is Pirate is Pirate, and Pirate is as much a sucker for luffox as we are for ryori and nytes.
A: Thrill Celebration Luffox (current)


B [C3, G1: both lightened version]


C [G1: lightened]


D [C3: lightened]

thanks scath c: i'll tweak them a bit, though im not really sure what you mean with the bulbs XD i've heard certain shades of red mess with some people so i'll def darken the eyes

Anyone care to weigh in on mine?

edit: The Nephini design is a joke submission, so you don't gotta comment on that one.

Ok so I've gotten a few suggestions to change color 1 on my Maple Tree Fae design, if y'all could help me out and just vote on which one is better that would be great. c:

1. original


2. slightly ashier


3. even more


The ashy brown is supposed to be like dried leaves I guess, II don't see anything wrong with the original imo but I don't mind changing it. Idk what other color would look good there, but if anyone can think of one feel free to let me know. ^-^