Good Day Everyone!!! - Take Two.
If you are being PINGed with in this post, that is because I have something directly to say to you about your current submissions at this time. Not all of it is bad. No, in fact a great deal of it is positive feedback and or simple commentary. You don't have to change a single thing if you don't want to, unless I come out and directly say so. And only in that case do you need to make the notated changes prior to deadline to make your submission eligible for possible placement with in the TOP 3 at the end of the week. And I know everyone would like to place at some point and time to have your hard work validated and seen. To have a moment to shine in the limelight so to speak. I get that, I truly do. And each of you are amazing talented designers, that is why I am giving these feedback posts on occasion to help you possible achieve that. So for now, simply find your name below and see what I had to say to you more directly. If you are requested to make a change and or do take my up on my suggestions...Please be sure to PING me a heads up afterwards so I can update the ETF post. Otherwise your changes maybe missed.
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@Miroh....I think you have an excellent start to your submission for this avian challenge. Your rikki design is cute over all. I love the use of the parrot fish trait, as well as the newly release ear trait. It defiant works for the most part, however the over all design is in a sense very grey. Your yellows are spot on, but the dark grey could used more of a deep blue hue to it. Just very slightly that is. And the light grey, honestly isn't seen on the bird at all. Maybe swapping it out for a creamy/off white coloration would do the treat there. And if there was a way to swap the dark blue grey around with the creamy/off white might make it more representational of the featured falcon. If anything, try to play around with the colors a little more and see what might work better. You can take and or leave what I have to say/suggestion. It will not hurt you either way, as it is more food for thought. Until then, keep up the great work!!
@Amberwing....This week, you gave us a few great designs that were all beautifully done. However, allow me to break them down one by one for individual review.
"House Finch" design was a brilliant choice for the griffi. I think you have a good start, and are close to having a spot on design to a degree for that proud looking little bird. I think your red coloring was a nice touch as an accent piece. The browns really work well, however there is a bit too much mocha coloration through out. Maybe soften that to a golden tan? The darker browns are fine, so no worries there. As for your traits, I think they are nice but a bit conflicting with each other. Maybe find a better merriment of traits instead. Some suggestions would be, instead of the frosted feather markings of the body, swap it out with some fancy striping? Your wings could remain the same, but if you go with the fancy striping you may want to swap out the double stripe for the faded wing trait. That would tone down and make a better transition I think personally. But again, that is an outside observation. You in no way need to do so, as it is just suggestions of possible improvement there.
"Osprey" design was a nice choice for the Sylvorpa. I honestly have no suggestions here outside of 2. First being maybe the yellow of the eyes, making them more golden. And swapping out the clown fish trait for the Achilles tang? Seriously though, over all on this one in particular you did amazingly well and should be happy with the outcome. Very nice...Very nice indeed.
"Great Horned Owl" design with the Ny'vene was spot on. I love how well it all came together. There isn't much negative feedback other then maybe try and include some of the creamy/off white coloration I see in the reference picture to soften the design up a little more. But nice choice on the species. a raptor for a raptor. Elegantly done!
"Oriole" design was done well. However, the design over all seems rather dark. The bird with in the reference picture is vibrant with stark crisp contrasts. Why not lighten up the over all design to reflect more of that? Also, you do have a bit more white then there should be. The white coloration was but a small accent color. Your primary colors should be black and vibrant bright orange. Maybe also swap out the striping for bernese might help mellow some of the over whelming white color a good bit leaving it a more accented part. Then just work primarily on the black and oranges a tad and you will have something a little more spot on. Either way, very nice work this week. Keep it up!
@Ammythesta...You have a great couple of submissions for this avian challenge. Nicely done there hon. But allow me a moment to break them down more for an one on one individual review.
"Golden Barn Owl" is an avian I actually really like. It reminds me of the movie Labyrinth. So you have me already smiling at that thought, as it was a great movie. However, this is about your design and not traveling down memory lane and movies. lol....No, which this vulnyx design of yours, I think you really have something here. I just think you missed out on using a lot of the colors found with in your chosen avian here. Like the caramelized browns, and somber oranges, not to mention the soft oranges that almost appear peachy in color. You chose to work with yellow and white. A greater portion of the avian is an off white, then the colors in a nice merriment of blends. My suggestion, would be try to incorporate a little more of the colors and you might have something closer to your featured avian friend here. Otherwise, very good.
"Kakapo" is an interesting bird that looks a lot like a small parrot. I think your choice in using the griffi was nice. However, the dark green is used a bit too excessively. The over all design needs to be lightened up a bit I think, and you will have it. Keep up the great work!
@Shimeree....I want to thank you for thinking outside the box and going with at least 1 avi design for this challenge. With everyone else attempting the challenge with pet designs, you took a risk which I think really stands out. Very well done there. But speaking of designs, allow me the chance to break them down for a more indepth review on a one by one basis.
"Fairy Penguin" avi design was very nicely down. It looks well though out. The only real issue I see and it isn't even a big one...So take it or leave it that is completely cool with me. But what the issue is there are hints of orange. I know that not all avi designs can be colored the way we want, and yes it is a nice contrast. However, it does not appear with in the image of your chosen avian for this design. If there is a way to swap it out with another color found with in the flightless bird try and go for that. Otherwise, leave the neat design alone.
"Superb Blue Fairy Wren" There is nothing wrong with this design at all. I love it. And in truth, I am ecstatic that you even attempted to do both the male and the female. Males and female avians are not the same colors, and I love that you chose to showcase that. Brilliant work done here, keep it up!
@BookishFlower....I think that your submissions this week were really nice. I like the elegance of your faelora design, and your sylvorpa. I must say, that avian The Blue Tit is extremely adorable. But allow me a moment to break down your designs by reviewing each individually.
"Flame Bowerbird" design has a bit of a whimsical flare which is a nice touch. However, the yellow coloring seems a bit dark. You might want to think about lightening it up a bit or make it more viberant? Just a suggestion there hon...
"The Blue Tit" design has 2 carried traits. Is there a reason for that as it does nothing for the over all design if it is not seen. Outside of that, I also noticed though the design is very nice and a has a good blend of the primary blues and yellows found with in the avian reference picture...There is still not trace of black nor white as seen in the picture as well. Maybe try incorporating that a little more might give you a closer visual appearance in matching it with your reference picture. Again just a suggestion, as you are designing a pet design based off the image. No need to change on my account by any means. Otherwise keep up the great work!
@Koterfaye....First off let me start by saying, I absolutely love the design. It has a darkness to it that is highly appealing. And though I love your trait choices. My only issue is that cardinals are a viberant red. Brightly colored. At least the males are. Maybe lighten the male up at least a bit would do nicely. Otherwise, keep up the nice work that you do hon.
@Dragongem23.... I admit that I never knew this avian creature existed. Thank you for sharing that with us. It is extremely colorful and interesting to see. Even with the muted coloration through out, you created a beautiful rikki design. My only issue is I would like to see a little more orangish red and or brighter yellows. Not much just a hint more if possible. But otherwise, it was beautifully done.
@Sootybean...With your "European Goldfinch" design, you had an rather unique way of portraying your chosen avian through your luffox design. Admittingly though, I am not sure if it is the wing choice and or tail choice is what is taking away from your over all vibe here, but one of them is clashing. Maybe try swapping them out a bit? I tried playing around with the choices a bit, but I couldn't find a good fit. At least not one that would fluidly go with the other traits if you have chosen. Or ones I think you might have liked. Apart from those areas, I do thoroughly enjoy the risks you took. It was defiantly a unique approach. A unique and beautiful design over all.
@Lenore....I don't honestly have much to say to you about your designs over all, as I was truly impressed with them both. I think you did an amazing job this week with this challenge. My only issue is with your Aeridini. The browns you used are a tad dark but still work well over all. Maybe lightening them up to a more burnt sierra might work a bit better. Mind you that is just a bit of a suggestion, as I find the design honestly quite beautiful.
@Annoyed...I am not sure how to say this...But your design looks like it belongs in a fantasy novel. It looks like an eccentric elven mount. I just love it. Very well made, and nice blending of colors. Keep up the great work!
@Limor...You have a great number of designs again this week, each as beautiful as the last. Allow me this moment to break them down by design for just a few of them. As some of your designs are just mind blowingly amazing and have no words to give them justice.
"Glossy Ibis"...The chosen avian for this design is unique looking, and when caught in just the right lighten extremely colorful. Gotta love iridescent feathers. They color shift with the passing of the light. I think you captured that aspect through out the over all design. However, I am not so sure if it is me...It could be me...But the feather jewelry trait seems a bit overwhelming. Almost like it is making the over all image a bit too busy. Maybe toning it down with the the mystical flowers, or lunar jewelry might be a better approach? Again just a suggestion here and nothing more. I do like how the colors contrast the each to a point. It does make it pop a bit with vibrancy. Very well done.
"African Jacana" Let's be honest with this one. This chosen avian with it's young is freakish like straight out of a sci -fi flick. It is unsettling to some, but I find it extremely fascinating. I believe your lup design was pretty. The traits were chosen very well. My only suggestion with this one is the top of the mane and the tip of the tail represent a small part of the bird. Yet the black or dark coloration was completely absent. Maybe include a little more of the darkness and it will make it perfect.
"Grackle" There are a crap ton of these avian friends around, especially down here in Texas. In fact they are so in abundance that a lot of the parking lot areas look like a scene straight out of a Hitchcock film called "The Birds". They are noisy, and appear almost always all black. That is if you see them from afar. When up close, and with the way the light hits them just right, their iridescent colors shine! And though your lup design is dark, you showcase that beauty beautifully. Very well done with this one.
"Argentavis" & "Elephant Bird" are both rather interesting birds, as well as absolutely terrifying. Wow. Though I am glad I won't run into them personally, it is sad to know they are no longer around to be watched and preferably studied in their natural habitats. With that being said, I think you did an wonderful job on both designs. Though with your Argentavis, there seems to be more light brown then featured on the chosen avian creature. Maybe you did so, so you could break up the monotony of dark chocolate brown on dark chocolate brown. Which I can get and totally relate to and understand. I mean there is some small hints of the lighter brown, and it does give an appealing presences with in your design. So no need to change. More like I was curious about that more than anything there.
"Tchira Antpitta" design was...I am not sure how to say this and give it justice here. But interesting and beautiful at the same itme. The picture does not appear as if anything is special. In truth it looks like a yellow bellied robin to me instead of the reddish orange bellied robin. Still it is nice to see, and your kelpari design was extremely well done. I really like how down to earth it appears. My only suggestion here would be to lighten it up a little to show off a little more of that yellow just a tad bit. Otherwise, keep it as is. Way to go Limor!
@Sunagakure....I have to admit, you picked one hell of a colorful bird. I mean wow here..It is like, where do I begin with this. You hit pretty much every color, outside of the deep dark rich blue color I see. Outside of that, your design is fantastic. Very nicely done!
@Beaubuddyz...Even though your designs are not in the ETF, there is a reason. I think it is nice to see a familiar pet I use to have when I was a child. I named her Chirp Chirp. She was a phenomenal parakeet, to the point she was wise and devious, and sneaky. We had to get a specialized cage to keep her contained. Otherwise she would escape because she was intelligent as all get out and terrorize the cats. She loved building nests in our hair..She was awesome. But that is all besides the point. This is about your design. You have an extremely great start. However, I don't see the rainbow coloration in your reference picture at all. You will need to change that prior to deadline for your submission to count. You can either do that by finding a parakeet that is rainbow colored naturally, or change your design to reflect more of your chosen avian friend. Please let me know if you need assistance with this, so that I can better help you out. |
