Much better! :)

i personally want the males leaves to look more ;like the females, or vice versa. maybe close the females eyes, to give her a nice smile, although i get the whole open-eyes thing. i think it would look cute if the male baby had an open mouthed smile. maybe give it a bit more chest fur, as a sign of the floof he will have as an adult. just a tiny thought XD

Other people beat me to suggesting most of these & did a better job, but something I didn't see was the alteration to the female's back/rump. I don't know how to explain in words, it just feels a bit better imo. I didn't mean to shorten the tail, I just have access to my phone at the moment and didn't want to distort it with the rest of the back. I would also prefer having flowers on both sides of the female's head, partially because it just bugs me that there's only one on opposite sides on the hatching and adult.


Edited to second some others' suggestions and refine some of mine a bit. Still not amazing at making the petals wavy like on the female, but other people have made better examples. Wanted to add a bit of fluff to the male's chest, but there was no way I'd be able to make it look good using a phone.

I personally like the "floof" on the male; if you are set on him having a large chest then I recommend making his legs slightly thicker, his torso larger, and adding a "floof" to the baby male. Perhaps that would balance it all out a bit.

The female's neck flower is awesome and I'd like to see the same treatment for the male's neck flower.

The overall direction is wonderful and progress looks amazing!
Just repeating the great suggestions already mentioned:

Male body shape tweaked, potentially bigger and/or raised rump.

Female face slight alterations? I know the perspective and angle is different from the male , but the lengthier face downturn of the face and facial features (pupils, mouth) seem maybe...too large/much? Maybe just my preference for a more "bambi" face XP

and....Dinnerbone you did such a fantastic job! I'm a fan of neck leaves but I wouldn't be hurt if it stayed as fur. There could be more genes added to potentially have both options, anyways.

I'm with Dinnerbone when it comes to the male's proportions, although either way, this revamp is a major improvement! If there would be one thing I'd opt to fix, it's the neck. The neck blob is still there...now it's just covered in fur (don't get me wrong, I do like the tufts). Try thinning the neck just a tad, and I do like the idea of adding a few more leaves similar to the female's leaves. Overall, I am very happy with these new deer-critters and I can't wait to see the revamp applied to my faelora pair!

Edit: I think that an easy fix for the long body issue might be to select the entirety of the neck, leaves, and head, and just move it back towards the body a bit.

just messing arounf more




beefing up the a. male's elbow and haunches
moved his head/neck area back a little bit
fixing the proportions on the a. female's raised foreleg and tweaking her chest
adjusting angle of her far hindleg
tweaking her snout length and poking her neck length
removed petal from her ear canal
some assorted poking of the fawns to have a look at

I find it kind of interesting that everyone is asking for a more masculine beefy look for the male, and I get it, male vs female body types and being relisting, but I kinda like the leaner look that the sketches are leaning into. I like how both of the new versions of the chest look, the frilly leaves are very nice.

But yeah, the back half of the male looks a bit longer than would probably be comfortable, and the antler angle could still be a little further back.

beautiful