Link: https://www.sylestia.com/forums/?thread=60031&page=6#51 Author: IvyCat Time Posted: 5/9/2018 at 11:31 AM Although this ends in less than a week I thought I'd sent in an interest ping x3 *shuffles* please don't kill me

I just saw the ping now, Sign Ups ended 3 hours ago so it's too late, I would have been interested if I had seen your ping and the thread earlier. Next time!

But in case more judges are still needed ping me, I can be a judge.
(I'm not sure If I can still enter as one considering the sign ups are now closed)

I've extended the deadline since It looks like people needed it. Everyone now has 5 more days to sign-up or edit their post. If you've already completed your entry ignore the ping, you need not re-send it or anything. However, you are free to edit your post and re-send the updated version. Also, every contestant is entitled to feedback from me. This should also give some of the people that saw this thread a bit later sometime. If you know anyone who is interested ping them or point them here.

@Dracornpotato-I wasn't sure if you would still be interested as your stuff was deleted and pinged you just in case, if you still don't want to I fully understand and will not ping you again. Simply do not reply to this post or enter the contest. However, I will be holding some workshops and whatnot so if you're interested in those let me know.

Chrome, I don't know if you'll like this or not but I decided to see if you'd be interested or not ^.^

I'd love feedback as long as it isn't "Ivy this doesn't make sense" or "You weren't suppose to turn it into a messy vent" x3

It's been extended, not sure if you got pinged by grape ^^

Oh, I would love feedback!

Lol, the point of the feedback is to be constructive so don't worry :p

Story 1
It was very good, a nice different angle on the character, you have creativity and good grammar. There's also a good attention to detail. I would caution you on using words too much. In the first paragraph there were a lot of she right after the other. you could use commas to change it into a bit more of a list to avoid that. As it's first person i'll let it pass but i'm cautioning you now. Also commas are your friends. There are a couple moments that you kind of cut off the sentence. it would work better with commas. Especially the last couple of sentences. If it's a creative choice then keep it but it wasn't obvious if it was a creative choice here.

Story 2
I couldn't find much of a problem with this one. As it was such a short story I won't ask you to expand on it since it works beautifully as is.

Judge Form

Username: Picnic97
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Have you ever judged a contest before? If so which/what kind of contest?: Nope.
Do you promise to be impartial and disregard who's entry it is and judge the entry itself?: Yes, of course.
What is your experience in how to judge writing: I have an associates degree in English.