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Name: Luna (Moonsong)

Tom or She-cat?: She-cat

Age: 14 Moons

Clan: Kittypet (join ThunderClan later)

Rank: -

Appearance:


Personality:
Very nice and curious. She is willing to take a mate, if she likes him and he likes her.

Orientation: Demi

Kin:
Snowpaw (sister, see below)

Mate(Optional): -

Backstory:
She was born to a grey and white she-cat alongside her sister, Snowflake. She spent her early life in a Twoleg Den, until another Twoleg took Snowflake away from her (adoption). Soon, she was taken to her mother. After some time, she decided to explore the Forest, but was driven away by a ThunderClan Patrol. Later, she would learn that her sister, Snowflake, joined ThunderClan. She hopes she will be able to join.

Extra: She currently eats kittypet food. She likes squirrel.

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Name: Snowpaw (Snowdawn)

Tom or She-cat?: She-cat

Age: 14 Moons

Clan: ThunderClan

Rank: Apprentice

Appearance:


Personality:
She is kind, just like her sister. She is very curious, often trying to explore on her own.

Orientation: Demi

Kin:
Luna (sister, see above)

Mate(Optional): -

Backstory:
She was born to a grey and white she-cat alongside her sister, Luna. She was taken from Luna at around 2 moons. At 10 Moons, she decided to go exploring, and surprise, ThunderClan allowed her to join. Her mentor is Silentcrow.

Extra: Loves mice.

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Name: Silentcrow

Tom or She-cat?: Tom

Age: 40 Moons

Clan: ThunderClan (previously RiverClan?)

Rank: Warrior

Appearance:


Personality:
He sounds tough. He is not the nicest cat that has roamed, but can be helpful at times.

Orientation: Bi

Kin:
Sparkshadow (mate)

Mate(Optional): Sparkshadow (secret)

Backstory:
He was found on Sunningrocks by a ThunderClan Patrol. They tried taking the kit to RiverClan, but they rejected him. So they decided to adopt him, since there's it's extremly unlikely ShadowClan or WindClan left him there, since they would have been seen. Lightday nursed him. His mentor was Lionstream. He gotten his warrior name, Silentcrow, after some training.

Extra: He loves birds. But he rarely eats it.

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Name: Sparkshadow

Tom or She-cat?: She-cat

Age: 20 Moons

Clan: RiverClan (possibly WindClan Blood)

Rank: Warrior

Appearance:

Scars on back when Hawk attacked

Personality:
She is kind and helpful. She knows a bit about herbs and healing because she spent some time in the Medicine Cat Den after the Hawk Attacked her.

Orientation: Pan

Kin:
Silentcrow (mate)

Mate(Optional): Silentcrow (secret)

Backstory:
She was born in ThunderClan to Earthfur and Fernecho. None of her siblings survived. Growing up, she was mostly alone, except for Rainkit and Stormkit. She wanted to become a Medincine Cat, since she knew a bit about herbs, but at that time, Mothwing was being trained by Mudfur. She became a warrior instead, gaining her Warrior Name, Sparkshadow, alongside her Clanmate, Raindream. She has a secret relationship with Silentcrow.

Extra: She likes bass. She hates birds.

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Name: Raindream

Tom or She-cat?: Tom

Age: 20 Moons

Clan: RiverClan

Rank: Warrior

Appearance:

Personality:
He prefers to be alone. Id you approach him, he mostly will be upset.

Orientation: Asexual

Kin:
Stormpaw (brother, killed by Twoleg Hunter Dogs)

Mate(Optional): -

Backstory:
His parents are Dawntail and Leafstep. He had no siblings. Growing up, he played with Sparkkit, but showed no love interest. He always wanted to be a warrior, hoping to become the leader. The mighty Rainstar, he always thought. He continued his training, and alongside Sparkpaw, gotten their warrior names, Sparkshadow and Raindream.

Extra: He loves trout.

These are all very good. However, since some of the other Clans are very lean, I must ask that you move some of them to the other Clans.

I am serious about needing you to move some to WindClan and RiverClan. They have three cats put together. Besides, I did say that I rather expected the Warrior Code to be broken. Here's your chance for mischief.

Sorry, I kinda forgot about it! Sparkshadow and Raindream can join ShadowClan.

There is only one cat in RiverClan, and two in WindClan I must ask you to put Sparkshadow and Raindream in RiverClan. After all, this will be the easiest way to keep Silentcrow and Sparkshadow together, perhaps even have something like Graystripe and Silverstream, where they both try to keep their relationship secret?

Sure!

Thanks! They look great!

Name: Zapkit
Tom or she-cat: She-cat
Age: 1 moon
Clan: Shadowclan
Rank: Kit
Appearance: A cute bright orange Tabby kitten that has a white tipped tail and red eyes.











Personality: kind, brave, and mischievous.
Orientation: ?
Mate: None
Backstory: Before Zapkit was born her parents were fierce warriors that did their best to protect and serve they're clan and wanted to raise a kit to become a fierce warrior like them.
Extra: Lionblaze

I see that you're rather new to the forums, so I'm going to give you this advice: Don't claim for yourself powers that were mentioned nowhere in the rules or form. I know that later on, there was the Three in the Warriors books, but to me it seems you're trying to force me to choose you. I cannot allow you to have any power granted by StarClan, at least without knowing what it is first. And there are no queens in ThunderClan, so you would wind up with a lone kit by herself with no queen to curl up against at night. And lastly, perhaps you should put Zapkit in ShadowClan. I know for a fact there is a cat that would be happy to take care of this kitten.

I promise you, I'm not trying to be mean, or rude. I'm trying to ensure the role play doesn't have any (glaring) potholes, and that everyone has a good time, not just a couple people. So, ultimately, I cannot accept you as you are. Make some changes, and I may be able to accept you.